A song I made - Looking for feedback - Help spread/support. <3

Thank you -

It's an honor that you've lent your hears...

- Always learning,
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Last Edited by Prophet. on 09/27/2012 11:13 PM

Pretty good man. I'd download and listen to this. I feel the concept and I gotta appreciate when people rap about real issues since there's so much of people being superficial going around.

I won't pretend I don't listen to that stuff too but something like this can really make you feel something. Keep doing what you're doing and working at your craft.

I rap too this is the first track from my mixtape coming out on October 5th.

/Respect -

Thank you for sharing some more talent man. I truly admire you trying to get a voice out there as well! I will like the videos you've got man, and leave a comment -~

Thanks alot. I liked your video and subscribed to your channel also. I'm definitely interested in whatever else you may put out in the future.

If you ever get a lot of views or some sort of views - Remember

The "Trending videos" are premade -

For example: You need (x) amount of views and likes to get on the trending board.

The counter stops counting and updates every few hours at 300 views - and locks for 24-48 hours for an non-paying user.


It'll never keep count of likes, dislikes, comments etc accurate.


Good luck on your journeys making music -

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Me too. I cannot stand rap in any form or fashion.

F A I L

Keep it up man. Its solid!

As long as you enjoyed producing it, it will never matter what your audience thinks. Its good to have them as moral support but at the end of the day, the more effort you put into your work the better your going to feel about it and thats the bottom line.

Do it from the heart and be happy while your doing it :)

(i gotta take my own damn advice....ha)

I do the best I can and learn something new every day! <3

Thank you for your advice and kindness <3

There is your problem right there. Don't use mental illness as an excuse. Every artist is a mental case in some way (any one that says other wise is narcissistic or just a well functioning Psychopath), you need to use it to your benefit. If you do something that is embarrassing, stuttering for example, then stutter with purpose. Exude confidence in your vocals. Each line has to be said with the emotional conviction that it describes. When you talk about rage we need to feel the rage in your voice, when you talk about love need to feel the love. It takes time and is hard to switch emotions that quick but is worth it. It is kind of like acting. It can be uncomfortable at first and you can feel like your not being real, but push through that. The moment your thought drifts and becomes negative or not ungenuine you loose the "connection."

Record yourself and listen for the emotion. If you don't feel it when you hear it then approach it differently.

the music doesn't sound mixed at all. The drums sounded paper thin, but it was obviously ran through a mastering program at the end and squashed it all to zero db.

The kick needs to be ballsy and bass heavy, the snare could use a bit more snap, some comp'd aux tracks and verb could thicken this up, some eq and effects on instruments would help.

yes capture a better vocal performance. i like to record vocals phrase by phrase about 4 times...that way you can go back and pick the best takes and piece it together like a puzzle. no need to try to get it right all the way through.

sounds like a default mastering plug in, which is essential, but it seems to have gotten the job done.

all in all for someone learning, good job! the only way to keep learning is to jump in there and keep experimenting!

Not too bad Brother!

If I was you I would make some adjustments like,doubling/tripling the Vocal tracks each in a different pitch to beef out the sound - double this again for the Choras..also I'd trim the very top off of the Highhats and Treble in general,try and sink the Vocal Tracks in amongst it just that little bit smoother - All in all though a decent bit of work!

Last Edited by Spittin'Cesium on 09/28/2012 01:49 AM

Nah man Rap can be good, its just the Rap we are used to being shuved down our throats is mostly ghetto trash bull shit. good sounding song OP

^^THIS^^ i forgot to mention doubling the vocals. like i said, i will record about 4 takes of each section (however long you feel comfortable performing at a time) then go back and pick the best TWO of each...so you end up with a main vox and a doubled vox track, have the volume lower on the 2nd vox track, and run them both thru all the same aux's and effects, and it will just make your voice sound MUCH thicker...most people can't perceive they are really hearing more than one of the same vocal take layered together several times.

Also the vocals sound like the are just kinda floating high above the rest of the music, beefing up the EQ of the music around the vocals, and pulling the overall volume of the vocals dowb will help, perhaps a bit of automation.

mix WITHOUT the mastering plugin, because with it being all slammed to zero DB you cant really hear the dynamics, apply the mastering AFTER the mix.

Great wasn not a waste of my time thanks for the post enjoyed the song!

The word "song" implies there will be actual singing, and that someone bothered to come up with a melody.

It's OK for tone deaf people to amuse themselves making "music" too, but it should really be called something else to avoid confusion.

Me too.

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Last Edited by Prophet. on 09/28/2012 03:30 AM

Nice, I enjoyed both along with the video to the 2nd. I recently made this chill piano based beat, it would sound sick with you rapping too it i dont know anyone who can rap :)

tptb love rap so it wont go away. They love everyone acting like they are 15 years old all the time

If you want some feedback, just Turn UP THE GAIIIIIIIIN!!!

That's beautiful OP...the sincerity of your heart shines though and is very touching. I normally don't like rap either, but I really...really....like everything about this song. Good luck!

I updated some?

Does it sound any different? I relaxed the vocals some and I also (Hopefully) made the beat less thin?

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Thank you all.

I like it mix it again with a auto tuner on the vocals and slow it down just a tad, so that twang thing comes out

Made some more changes - I guess let me know!!!
Hopefully fixed that twang a bit:


I tried using the auto-tuner with many different settings:
I assure you- It sounds terrible. Clashes against the beat hard, and I was trying to find another way around it-

Did some vocal adjustments again - hopefully the slur / 50 cent thing isn't as announced as before -

Let me know! <3

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**Edit**

I appreciate all the help, and direction:

Any suggestions are welcome and wonderful.



Thank you all

sounds abit better nice!

Any new suggestions?

Thank you for listening, and helping. <3

No suggestions because I know nothing about music except whether I like it or not.

I never liked rap before until I heard your two songs. I really do like them. You definitely have talent!

I've bookmarked your youtube channel and am looking forward to more.

5* for putting yourself out there for criticism.

Without criticism, we wouldn't be able to distinguish difference.

It's important in all aspects! Why try to fight something the world will always have?

I'd like to try and use it - to get better and improve.


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Thank you very much.

Hahaha Yea lots of haters out there dont let them get to you good song!