Ladies who appreciate poetry? Think my GF will like this poem I wrote her? | |
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MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:22 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | In due time. Her brother informed me that no one has ever written anything for her so while she's away visiting her kiddos for Thanksgiving I wanted to prepare a few little tokens of my love and appreciation to give her when she gets back. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 1212477 United States 11/20/2012 06:24 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | In due time. Her brother informed me that no one has ever written anything for her so while she's away visiting her kiddos for Thanksgiving I wanted to prepare a few little tokens of my love and appreciation to give her when she gets back. Well alright then. So long as your are not screwing over another decent girl just for someone to have sex with until you dump her. |
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MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:27 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | In due time. Her brother informed me that no one has ever written anything for her so while she's away visiting her kiddos for Thanksgiving I wanted to prepare a few little tokens of my love and appreciation to give her when she gets back. Well alright then. So long as your are not screwing over another decent girl just for someone to have sex with until you dump her. Absolutely not. My loyalty, commitment and dedication will always lay solely with her. |
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Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 06:30 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | girls like things like that, but there is a fine line between ballsy and impressing a girl and just being flat out cheesy and cliché. that poem is a prime example of cheesy and cliché. so if you are really going to show your 'gf' that poem, please tell me you are thinking about marrying her, because if you aren't then that poem just seems like some cliché high school garbage. trust me, poems are good if they are written good and if they don't push any boundaries. spewing love out of almost every sentence is flat out lame. you're not bob dylan and unless you are some sort of musician, I suggest you don't show that to her... |
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Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 06:32 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | I would never show it to any girls unless I was piss drunk or I really really really really really really really liked her. and KNEW she felt exactly the same way. |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:33 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | girls like things like that, but there is a fine line between ballsy and impressing a girl and just being flat out cheesy and cliché. Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 that poem is a prime example of cheesy and cliché. so if you are really going to show your 'gf' that poem, please tell me you are thinking about marrying her, because if you aren't then that poem just seems like some cliché high school garbage. trust me, poems are good if they are written good and if they don't push any boundaries. spewing love out of almost every sentence is flat out lame. you're not bob dylan and unless you are some sort of musician, I suggest you don't show that to her... Um, actually we both are. Thanks for the cheesy and cliche shitty feedback. |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:35 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and don't get me wrong, I love poetry and I even love writing it sometimes because I'm good, but... Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 I would never show it to any girls unless I was piss drunk or I really really really really really really really liked her. and KNEW she felt exactly the same way. Well, really really really really really really really liking her would be the understatement of the fucking century. LOL! |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 06:38 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | girls like things like that, but there is a fine line between ballsy and impressing a girl and just being flat out cheesy and cliché. Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 that poem is a prime example of cheesy and cliché. so if you are really going to show your 'gf' that poem, please tell me you are thinking about marrying her, because if you aren't then that poem just seems like some cliché high school garbage. trust me, poems are good if they are written good and if they don't push any boundaries. spewing love out of almost every sentence is flat out lame. you're not bob dylan and unless you are some sort of musician, I suggest you don't show that to her... Um, actually we both are. Thanks for the cheesy and cliche shitty feedback. like i'm going to spend more than 5 minutes of my time reading and analyzing some wannabe musicians shitty poem? good luck sir I wish you and your girl the best, love is freakin complicated. |
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MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:40 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | girls like things like that, but there is a fine line between ballsy and impressing a girl and just being flat out cheesy and cliché. Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 that poem is a prime example of cheesy and cliché. so if you are really going to show your 'gf' that poem, please tell me you are thinking about marrying her, because if you aren't then that poem just seems like some cliché high school garbage. trust me, poems are good if they are written good and if they don't push any boundaries. spewing love out of almost every sentence is flat out lame. you're not bob dylan and unless you are some sort of musician, I suggest you don't show that to her... Um, actually we both are. Thanks for the cheesy and cliche shitty feedback. like i'm going to spend more than 5 minutes of my time reading and analyzing some wannabe musicians shitty poem? good luck sir I wish you and your girl the best, love is freakin complicated. Sounds like someone is jaded. |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:42 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and my bad if I offended you, to tell the truth I only read like 2 lines out of that Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 but as soon as I saw love I said "oh it's one of those poems." i'm sure it's actually alright I just don't really like the subject matter Okay, well when someone pours all their heart, all their soul and the very core of their being into something USUALLY the non-asshole thing to do would be to NOT insult them calling their work 'shitty' or implying they are some two-bit hack 'wannabe' musician. Just for future reference. You seem like the type that cringes and scowls at couples who hold hands in public. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 06:51 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and my bad if I offended you, to tell the truth I only read like 2 lines out of that Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 but as soon as I saw love I said "oh it's one of those poems." i'm sure it's actually alright I just don't really like the subject matter Okay, well when someone pours all their heart, all their soul and the very core of their being into something USUALLY the non-asshole thing to do would be to NOT insult them calling their work 'shitty' or implying they are some two-bit hack 'wannabe' musician. Just for future reference. You seem like the type that cringes and scowls at couples who hold hands in public. I might be kind of irritable cuz I haven't had a cigarette in a while, but... pouring your heart into something doesn't automatically make it good, it just makes it full of effort and good intentions and maybe that was an asshole move on my part, but sometimes that's what a lot of people need in there lives... when you have a bunch of people telling you something is black when it's really white you'll go no where in life because you're seeing an illusion. but what I am even talking about, this is poetry right? and just to let you know, i'm not the type that cringes and scowls at couples in public, I'm the type that cringes and scowls at bullshit. as in, oh look at that tool, she's acting all nice and holding his hand and treating him good because she needs a ride home and some money to go shopping. bullshit is what I scowl at |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28087028 Australia 11/20/2012 06:54 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | "Basking in her eternal, luminous glow. They say the best things in life are worth the wait, So I will be patient, As I await the return of my beloved" Your GF may hate it, but seeing how it's really a love song to satan and about you selling your soul, I think he /she will like it. Btw I hope you got a good deal cause if that's how satan inspires you , you may want to renegotiate the contract |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 06:55 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | "Basking in her eternal, luminous glow. Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28087028 They say the best things in life are worth the wait, So I will be patient, As I await the return of my beloved" Your GF may hate it, but seeing how it's really a love song to satan and about you selling your soul, I think he /she will like it. Btw I hope you got a good deal cause if that's how satan inspires you , you may want to renegotiate the contract this is why I love this forum |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:56 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and my bad if I offended you, to tell the truth I only read like 2 lines out of that Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 but as soon as I saw love I said "oh it's one of those poems." i'm sure it's actually alright I just don't really like the subject matter Okay, well when someone pours all their heart, all their soul and the very core of their being into something USUALLY the non-asshole thing to do would be to NOT insult them calling their work 'shitty' or implying they are some two-bit hack 'wannabe' musician. Just for future reference. You seem like the type that cringes and scowls at couples who hold hands in public. I might be kind of irritable cuz I haven't had a cigarette in a while, but... pouring your heart into something doesn't automatically make it good, it just makes it full of effort and good intentions and maybe that was an asshole move on my part, but sometimes that's what a lot of people need in there lives... when you have a bunch of people telling you something is black when it's really white you'll go no where in life because you're seeing an illusion. but what I am even talking about, this is poetry right? and just to let you know, i'm not the type that cringes and scowls at couples in public, I'm the type that cringes and scowls at bullshit. as in, oh look at that tool, she's acting all nice and holding his hand and treating him good because she needs a ride home and some money to go shopping. bullshit is what I scowl at I'm sure there's a lot of illusions you might see with your head lodged so firmly up your ass. |
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MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:57 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | "Basking in her eternal, luminous glow. Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28087028 They say the best things in life are worth the wait, So I will be patient, As I await the return of my beloved" Your GF may hate it, but seeing how it's really a love song to satan and about you selling your soul, I think he /she will like it. Btw I hope you got a good deal cause if that's how satan inspires you , you may want to renegotiate the contract |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 06:58 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Lol you have women all wrong Quoting: Anonymous Coward 11061563 when she reads it she will be like "oh fuck this is long, ill just skim read it to make him happy" Keep it short and simple boy. Yeah, not sure why so many people assume she must be some ignorant fuck that can't read a page worth of a poem that someone took the time to carefully write out just for her. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 11061563 Canada 11/20/2012 07:00 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Lol you have women all wrong Quoting: Anonymous Coward 11061563 when she reads it she will be like "oh fuck this is long, ill just skim read it to make him happy" Keep it short and simple boy. Yeah, not sure why so many people assume she must be some ignorant fuck that can't read a page worth of a poem that someone took the time to carefully write out just for her. If I were a girl I wouldn't read any of your psycho shit. If I were married for 20 years I still wouldn't read that, common man women are like men on the inside. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 07:05 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and my bad if I offended you, to tell the truth I only read like 2 lines out of that Quoting: Anonymous Coward 28097479 but as soon as I saw love I said "oh it's one of those poems." i'm sure it's actually alright I just don't really like the subject matter Okay, well when someone pours all their heart, all their soul and the very core of their being into something USUALLY the non-asshole thing to do would be to NOT insult them calling their work 'shitty' or implying they are some two-bit hack 'wannabe' musician. Just for future reference. You seem like the type that cringes and scowls at couples who hold hands in public. I might be kind of irritable cuz I haven't had a cigarette in a while, but... pouring your heart into something doesn't automatically make it good, it just makes it full of effort and good intentions and maybe that was an asshole move on my part, but sometimes that's what a lot of people need in there lives... when you have a bunch of people telling you something is black when it's really white you'll go no where in life because you're seeing an illusion. but what I am even talking about, this is poetry right? and just to let you know, i'm not the type that cringes and scowls at couples in public, I'm the type that cringes and scowls at bullshit. as in, oh look at that tool, she's acting all nice and holding his hand and treating him good because she needs a ride home and some money to go shopping. bullshit is what I scowl at I'm sure there's a lot of illusions you might see with your head lodged so firmly up your ass. oh stop it, I like how you have absolutely nothing intelligent to say so you resort to insulting me. you want my real opinion? maybe your poem sounds good to you, because well, you wrote it and "poured your heart out." but to me, it sounds just like every other love poem I have been forced to read in my life. there is absolutely nothing original about it just pretentious words and boring metaphors/similes filled with a general theme that every other cheesy love poem has... the "oh my god you're so special I would die without you :'(" get real |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 07:07 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and while it is difficult to be original with a lame love poem, it's very possible I've done it, it's not that hard, especially if your heart is in it. I recommend you a gram of weed and an empty room... probably a little bit of vodka too.. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 07:07 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | and while it is difficult to be original with a lame love poem, it's very possible I've done it, it's not that hard, especially if your heart is in it. I recommend you a gram of weed and an empty room... probably a little bit of vodka too.. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 28097479 United States 11/20/2012 07:09 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Lol you have women all wrong Quoting: Anonymous Coward 11061563 when she reads it she will be like "oh fuck this is long, ill just skim read it to make him happy" Keep it short and simple boy. Yeah, not sure why so many people assume she must be some ignorant fuck that can't read a page worth of a poem that someone took the time to carefully write out just for her. If I were a girl I wouldn't read any of your psycho shit. If I were married for 20 years I still wouldn't read that, common man women are like men on the inside. lololol |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 1898146 United States 11/20/2012 07:09 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | malachi your poem is stirring and evoked a tenderness in my heart.... I dream of a connection like this.... i have HOPE that maybe someday it will be But I also wanted to say... Your poem also reminded me of those written for Christ's mother, Mary. She could fit into this equation It is a beautiful art and you have crowned it with your flowing loving words be LOVE |
MALACHI (OP) User ID: 27724247 United States 11/20/2012 07:11 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | malachi Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1898146 your poem is stirring and evoked a tenderness in my heart.... I dream of a connection like this.... i have HOPE that maybe someday it will be But I also wanted to say... Your poem also reminded me of those written for Christ's mother, Mary. She could fit into this equation It is a beautiful art and you have crowned it with your flowing loving words be LOVE Well, my Beloved is a Virgo and a very wonderful and blessed Mother as well so how strikingly apropos. Thank you, friend! |