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in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE

 
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in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
I wrote this song in 10 minutes, Anyway,



Spiritual Suicide

Wiping the tears from those eyes
Ready to press the button
Entering my demise

Praying to a monster all my life
Escaping this rotting sphere
Diluting the pain with this knife
This path I have chosen
Devoured my fear

Don't bid my farewell
You'll pay in full
I'm leaving this hell
No longer a fool

My purpose in life have been lies all along
I'm ending myself because I don't belong
No regretting while I ascend to the stars
Entering a place to heal my battle scars

We all were deceived by puppet masters
Raping our years because they're bastards

Nothing is of this world any longer
Death engineered plagues
Designed by men

I'm ashamed to be in the same species
Turning our only existance into feces
Evil on the compass
Sparking our brains
Breathing in poison
We are to blame

Spiritual suicide, condoned by kings
No magical savior with bright wings
Death sentence from the first inhale
Why can't you realize, humans fail

Now allow me to leave this hell
Shattering these locks
Escaping my cell

Don't wait up for me
You'll be their one day
Through force or suicide
I don't blame you
So don't do the same
I've made up my mind
Long live the endgame
Anonymous Coward (OP)
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04/10/2011 11:07 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
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Cool
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04/10/2011 11:09 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
But where is the music?
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04/10/2011 11:13 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Well....For one thing, humans don't fail. We have the power and allways had the power to control and change the future. It's just that Jesus and Lord new we would fuck it all up.

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04/10/2011 11:15 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Well....For one thing, humans don't fail. We have the power and allways had the power to control and change the future. It's just that Jesus and Lord new we would fuck it all up.

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 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1279601


Listen to yourself. We fail... the elite control, the rest are slaves...and there's nothing we can do about it.. we fail..
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
But where is the music?
 Quoting: Cool 1334094


There isn't any. I write songs and I scream, sadly; I'm still finding a band
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04/10/2011 11:20 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Well....For one thing, humans don't fail. We have the power and allways had the power to control and change the future. It's just that Jesus and Lord new we would fuck it all up.

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 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1279601



Anyway, I said rate the song. Lmao there are bands that talk about greek mythology, I'm glad I didn't submit anything like that here, id be reading "his name is satan not odin" or whatever... I didn't ask for people to find the false meaning.. its death metal..
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04/10/2011 11:23 AM
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I would recommend against posting your works in a public forum like this. Find someone you trust and have them proof read/edit your work in private and copyright it first. ;)
Your daily dose of sanity in an insane world.
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04/10/2011 11:32 AM
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I would recommend against posting your works in a public forum like this. Find someone you trust and have them proof read/edit your work in private and copyright it first. ;)
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So your saying its good? Lawl.. I don't care if people use it, I'm very creative, I could take that title and make another song with it if needed.. none of my work is a final copy, all rough draft. I don't even expect to get successful, its just for fun.

But thank you.
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04/10/2011 11:39 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Sounds like the suicide cult got to you
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04/10/2011 11:42 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Sounds like the suicide cult got to you
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1336142


That is what I was going for.. thank you

But its funny because, I believe in God and I wouldn't suicide..haha..
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04/10/2011 11:52 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
Sounds like the suicide cult got to you
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1336142


That is what I was going for.. thank you

But its funny because, I believe in God and I wouldn't suicide..haha..
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1155825


Good
Yes we were all indoctrinated into a system we did not choose ourselfs.
One feels powerless at times.
The family, the job,the car,the house,the dreams
All so linear
Feels like a robot in a factory huh
sad eyed lady of lowlands
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04/10/2011 11:57 AM
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I like the song--- it sounds cool when you use a text to voice program... try taking out the ME, MY and I words, and use YOU instead, sort of like a letter is being written to someone.......and the song will be more universal, and more mystical....plus maybe throw in some odd insider references like Bob Dylan used to do in the song Sad Eyed LAdy of the Lowlands:

"With YOUR mercury mouth in the missionary times,
And YOUR eyes like smoke and YOUR prayers like rhymes,
And YOUR silver cross, and YOUR voice like chimes,
Oh, who among them do they think could bury YOU?"

.. but lyrics aside.... I'm worried about you.....

Please please please please please please...

DON'T buy into the illuminati DEATH cult designed to take you down...
.... they want you to commit suicide....
.... they want you to abort your kids
......they want your family to divorce and fall apart...
......they want you to be disabled with vaccines, Lyme and morgellons...
.... they want you to live isolated, alone and depressed...
....they want you to be depressed so they can make more money off selling you antidepressants, alcohol or drugs before you commit suicide...
.....they want you to embrace the Black Swan lifestyle... dark ecstasy theater and all things that are bad for you, and demoralize your beautiful spirit.

DON'T GIVE THEM THE ******SATISFACTION***** OF WINNING THEIR PSY OP WAR AGAINST YOU...

CHOOSE THE OPPOSITE OF WHAT *****THEY ****WANT FOR YOU

..... LIGHT
..... LOVE, and
......LIFE



You have the power... don't let them take your power.
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04/10/2011 11:57 AM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
If only you seen my other songs, I'm one step ahead with all of the (known) conspiracys. I call it a fenceless prison.
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04/10/2011 12:11 PM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
I like the song--- it sounds cool when you use a text to voice program... try taking out the ME, MY and I words, and use YOU instead, sort of like a letter is being written to someone.......and the song will be more universal, and more mystical....plus maybe throw in some odd insider references like Bob Dylan used to do in the song Sad Eyed LAdy of the Lowlands:

"With YOUR mercury mouth in the missionary times,
And YOUR eyes like smoke and YOUR prayers like rhymes,
And YOUR silver cross, and YOUR voice like chimes,
Oh, who among them do they think could bury YOU?"

.. but lyrics aside.... I'm worried about you.....

Please please please please please please...

DON'T buy into the illuminati DEATH cult designed to take you down...
.... they want you to commit suicide....
.... they want you to abort your kids
......they want your family to divorce and fall apart...
......they want you to be disabled with vaccines, Lyme and morgellons...
.... they want you to live isolated, alone and depressed...
....they want you to be depressed so they can make more money off selling you antidepressants, alcohol or drugs before you commit suicide...
.....they want you to embrace the Black Swan lifestyle... dark ecstasy theater and all things that are bad for you, and demoralize your beautiful spirit.

DON'T GIVE THEM THE ******SATISFACTION***** OF WINNING THEIR PSY OP WAR AGAINST YOU...

CHOOSE THE OPPOSITE OF WHAT *****THEY ****WANT FOR YOU



..... LIGHT
..... LOVE, and
......LIFE



You have the power... don't let them take your power.
 Quoting: sad eyed lady of lowlands 926464



I love this song called fear cataylst its by scar symmetry

But there is these lines I really like

"They'll never fight you, they never will. They'll even hold you, your mind to steal"

Check out the song, its good.

Listen to the whole song

Anonymous Coward
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04/10/2011 12:18 PM
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Re: in need of a literature inclined person to rate another song i did SONG THREE
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