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Use words sparingly - read "Of Mice and Men" for example. Avoid passive verb structure. And from an article I read about how to write fantasy stories: "Show" don't "tell".
Did you find any scrapes or bruises when you felt your head in paragraph 1? I'd have rather read "Pain shot down my forehead as my fingers found a jagged cut at the edge of my hairline on the left side of my forehead".
I'm no writer, but since you wanted opinions - here's another one, for what it's worth. Good luck!!!
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